Wednesday, May 21, 2014

THE WAGON

Is there something distinct
about an abandoned red wagon
in a flowerbed overcome with weeds

collecting prickly rain
falling down in sheets,
each plop overflowing,
green grass growing
taller with each drop

and two scraggly kids peeking
through their bedroom window
waiting for the sun?

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Poetic Inspiration~
Poetry Jam: Rain
PU Mid-Week Motif: The Color Green (14 lines max)
Poetic Asides: An Object poem

32 comments:

Susan said...

Yes. It's an image of longing and a circle of hope. Your poem makes me think of William Carlos Williams: “The Red Wheelbarrow” and reminds me that a bright color is necessary to help us see the rest. Grin.

Joseph Hesch said...

Lovely, Laurie. Great vision and imagination in crafting an image that is complete in visual and emotional dimension.

Jae Rose said...

Waiting for the sun and to hitch their wagon again..what a vibrant scene..i would probably issue raincoats and wellie boots and let them go out ;)

Kathryn said...

Love the visual of the kids looking out of the window.

Helen said...

Laurie, 'scraggly kids' fits the vibe of your poem perfectly! Love it!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I can see the scene so clearly!

Brian Miller said...

ha. yes there is...and for their sakes, i hope the rain stops...and i bet it makes the wheelbarrow happy too...smiles.

Gabriella said...

I can just picture it all. It could just be painted or used for a scene in a movie. Very good take on the prompt!

alan1704 said...

Abandoned red Wagon - love this forlorn image of forgotten dreams and hope.

Sumana Roy said...

great visual Laurie...

kaykuala said...

Sometimes rain is an inconvenience when it impacts on our plans! One longs for the good days! Nicely Laurie!

Hank

Mary said...

Laurie, interesting images here. Your poem reminded me of "The Red Wheelbarrow" poem as well. I can just picture that wheelbarrow abandoned.

Gail said...

I loved my red wagon!

Well done.

Vandana Sharma said...

Very vivid description. I could see it all.

Peggy said...

I can see this wagon with the weeds and the falling rain--and the waiting kids. Lovely images.

Marielle Collins said...

It's a beautiful poem, Laurie. I can see it all!

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Lovely! And I have no doubt it was meant to be reminiscent of the Williams poem. :) Brave, to allude to something so famous — and you have succeeded beautifully, extending his image into your own.

Arathi Harihar said...

waiting for the sun to come...such a hope..very nice Laurie

Ayushee Ghoshal said...

You know, this reminded me of my childhood days. Stirred nostalgia. Thanks for this beautiful poetry.

Gillena Cox said...

your words paint a beautiful canvas

much love...

grapeling said...

especially admire the last stanza, Laurie ~

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

Laurie,

This poem brings me memories of my country holiday childhood, visiting my grandmother. Old farm items used to display many flowers. It was always pretty and memories always stuck within my mind...Your red wagon, is the same!!!

Eileen

Wendy Bourke said...

Wonderfully penned. I am there is that flower bed, Laurie, looking back at those kids.

artbyrae said...

I love the picture this paints

ccchampagne said...

Very vividly painted moment in time... Very nice!

Susan Lindquist said...

Great snapshot image here, Laurie! Plaintive image ...

Donna Smith said...

Nice! I think my husband looks out the window the same way when the lawn is overgrown from two weekends of rain! No mowing till it dries out! Everything looks abandoned and neglected then.

humbird said...

'green grass growing
taller with each drop' ~ what a nice animated image! :)

Anne V (Anne The Obscure) said...

Lovely. I saw it all in full hyper color. Great lines.

mywordwall said...

ah, there is such longing here. I wish I can let out the children to play outdoors and reclaim the red wheelbarrow.

Nicholas V said...

I can relate to that image of childhood that your poem expresses so well, Laurie!

Anne V (Anne The Obscure) said...

I love the imagery of the red wagon and the scraggly kids. I am starting to get a feel for your style, and.. I am a fan!!